2007年10月19日 星期五
The city I like most in Taiwan is Taipei. I always go to Taipei during the spring vacation with my friends. Although traffic in Taipei is terrible, I still can go anywhere by MRT. The place where I like to visit is Danshuei. The reasons why I like there are that I have friends live there and Danshui has its famous view and food. At Danshui, I can enjoy the view of Fisherman's Wharf, but also can eat delicious foods at there such as A-Gei, Fish ball soup, Iron-hard Preserved Egg and so on. I love Taipei and I wish I could visit Taipei next spring vacation.
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You can avoid repeating "Taipei" three times in the first three sentences by replacing it with "there" in the second sentence, and by saying "Although the traffic is terrible,".
In your second sentence, you don't need "where". I'd say it's wrong and should be deleted (preferable) or replaced with "that" (less good style).
"The reasons why I like there are that I have friends live there and Danshui has its famous view and food." This sentence can be made better by writing it thus: "I like Danshui because some of my friends live there and because it has a famous view and delicious food."
In the next sentence, the conjunction is wrong. It should be "and", not "but". You aren't making any kind of contrasting or contradictory statement by saying that you can enjoy the view and eat delicious food.
Otherwise, clear expression.
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