2007年11月11日 星期日
Friend and I cooked lunch today. We both like to eat spaghetti, so we cooked it for our lunch. I cooked bacons and onions first. Then, She cooked spaghetti to get ready for use. After few minutes, I poured out the tomato sauce into the pot to mix with bacon and onions. It smelled good. Actually, the steps what we did was right and there was no mistake. Then, I finally added some water into the pot because the sauce was too sticky. Otherwise, it would be too salty. But, after what we did, I guessed we were wrong because the sauce was too runny. After entering water, the sauce flavor was too light. The food looked delicious, but it was unpalatable. We would like to eat in restaurants instead of cooking by ourselves.
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This is an informal blog, yes, but your first sentence is too informal. It has to be either "A friend" or "My friend" or "One of my friends". As it is now -- written in abbreviated English -- your sentence suggests that your friend's name is Friend.
"to get ready for use" is a meaningless phrase. The sentence should be "Then she cooked the spaghetti". Why would she have cooked it if you had not intended to eat (i.e., "use") it? No comma after "then".
"After a few minutes..." If you leave out the necessary function words (things like articles), you sound like a foreigner. That's fine if that's what you want to sound like.
Too bad you can't say the same about your English. This kind of writing should be just too simple to cause third-year English students to make two such avoidable mistakes in a single sentence: (1) "the steps what we did" is both grammatically and idiomatically incorrect. It should be simply "What we did..."; (2)"the steps what we did was right" is grammatically wrong because the subject of the sentence, "the steps" is plural, but the main verb, "was", is singular.
"added water to the pot" is idiomatic here.
Do you mean "thick" rather than "sticky"? I've never seen sticky tomato sauce, and I've been making my own as well as using store-bought tomato sauce for many decades.
And then you seem to confuse "sticky" with "salty". I wish you'd make up your mind about what you want to say.
"After entering water," isn't English in this sentence. You could say it if it ended with something like "I felt warm and relaxed" or "very cold and started to shiver". But when I look at that phrase, all I can see are the Chinese characters 在進入水以後, not 在投入水以後 [AltaVista Babelfisah translations].
"If you describe food as unpalatable, you mean that it is so unpleasant that you can hardly eat it" [Collins Cobuild Dictionary]. You probably meant to say something else, such as, "but it didn't taste very good". Use simple words for simple ideas. They are generally clearer, easier to use, and easier for the reader to understand.
If you prefer to eat in restaurants, you need to earn lots of money. Eating at home is usually much cheaper and more healthful than eating in restaurants. And when you make your own food, you know exactly what goes into it. You don't have to wonder how many cockroaches tasted your meal before you did, how many cooks or servers might have spit into your food before you started to eat it, what might have fallen on the floor before you put it into your mouth, or whether the cooks washed their hands after using the toilet and before preparing and cooking your food with their bare hands.
It's best to suppress your imagination when you eat in a restaurant. I usually don't have any trouble doing that. Do you?
You cooked spaghetti? That sounds great! Since I moved out,I never cook anything by myself, except for of using an electric rice cooker of simply instant noodles.
You are really lucky to have more time tasting your own cooking(even it doesn't taste very good, does it?).
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